We’ll sail on amidst
this saddened overcast-
with its gentle slabs
of cotton hurled
over the skyline,
concealing
our confined qualms,
which churned whitecaps
into their finality.
Serenaded us by
the ghost of the wind,
through its bosom
as it penetrated
the cracks of stones.
These armored hands –
fra-
gile as our hearts
concealed the earthly vows
sworn before heaven
and
earth
which drew the demarcated thin line
between each extremities.
I stood
before
you
with a
camou-
flaged
sin
as though imparting
the other me-
to you
with this pure ether of
whites and hopes,
Brought us to the very depth of unfathomable love. νλπ™
nino Said:
on March 18, 2008 at 12:15 am
When I read this the sound the words made seemed to whisper its breathy promise.
But that was how far it went for me. After the first line, with its promising even if rather cliched “we’ll sail on amidst,” I came to a halt after the word “saddened” coming before “overcast” with a dash and nothing else to connect that dash to.
And then the following lines didn’t seem to make sense anymore. I think these were supposed to describe the heavy clouds, but the attempt at a paradoxical description didn’t work at all.
After that comic turn, I was thoroughly lost at sea. Caught in a squall.